[Davisgig] [Davisgig-announce] Fwd: City of Davis, CA: City Seeks Two Community Members for Broadband Advisory Task Force

[Robert Nickerson]

Hi

Thanks Dave, we are all anxious to make something great happen with a 
fiber network for Davis. I appreciate your desire for us to represent 
ourselves to the best of our ability, to ensure we achieve the desired 
outcome.

That being said too, this last email sent to the  davis gig announce 
list  was not something that was closely thought out, it was more just a 
forward of availability of the at large positions, which we hope capable 
and like ,inded citizens  will fulfill.

. The next email to that list  will  have more thought to it and 
editing, and I'll make sure to forward it to you first.

thanks
RAN.

On 1/28/2016 11:55 PM, Dave Hart wrote:
> Rob, I obviously support DavisGIG's efforts and the leadership you 
> have taken on.  However, you need an editor to ensure your 
> communications inspire confidence in your audience.  Everyone who 
> writes a single line needs an editor, so I encourage you to seek one 
> out, maybe among your closest associates, and to build in some time 
> for messages to be edited or, at least, to adjust your expectations 
> regarding how quickly you can turn around a communication.  Below is 
> an example of how your email could have been improved.  The first 
> block is using strikeout and underline to highlight edited text in 
> red.  In case you are using plain text, the next block is the end 
> result of my edits.  Your original version is below my signature block 
> for comparison.  Yes, I would be willing to perform some editing for 
> you, but I have no idea what sort of schedules you are on. I do 
> encourage you to check with your close friends to get their opinion on 
> the value of edited communication and support everything you are doing 
> to show Comcast the door.
>>
>> Hi, All
>>
>> Let's get open access, community-owned fiber optic Internet for all 
>> residences and businesses in Davis!
>>
>> So DavisGIG efforts _to accomplish this goal_ are continuing through 
>> our _informal_ activist group, and will now _also _proceeding more 
>> formally through this _the newly formed Broadband Advisory_ Task Force.
>>
>> We need to work on this through _using_ both approaches.
>>
>> Anyone in the community interested in serving _on the Task Force_ as 
>> a "member of the public" should be _is_ encouraged to apply.
>>
>> Also know that _DavisGIG plans to increase_ more outreach _to (the 
>> community_? our own members?)___over this next year._ will happen 
>> from this group will occur this year.
>>
>> More updates soon!
>
> Hi, All
>
> Let's get open access, community-owned fiber optic Internet for all 
> residences and businesses in Davis!
>
> DavisGIG efforts to accomplish this goal are continuing through our 
> informal activist group, and will now also proceed more formally 
> through the newly formed Broadband Advisory Task Force.
>
> We need to work on this using both approaches.
>
> Anyone in the community interested in serving on the Task Force as a 
> "member of the public" is encouraged to apply.
>
> Also know that DavisGIG plans to increase outreach to (the community? 
> our own members?) over this next year.
>
> More updates soon!
>
>
> Dave Hart, Davis, CA 95618
> On 1/27/16 5:29 PM, Robert Nickerson via Davisgig-announce wrote:
>>
>> Hi All
>>
>> Let's get open access community owned fiber optic Internet for all 
>> residences and businesses in Davis!
>>
>> So DavisGIG efforts are continuing through our  activist group, and 
>> will now proceeding more formally through this Task Force.
>>
>> We need to work on this through both approaches.
>>
>> Anyone in the community interested in  serving as  a member of the 
>> public should be encouraged to apply.
>>
>> Also know that more outreach will happen from this group will occur 
>> this year.
>>
>> More updates soon!
>
>
>
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